Monday, December 5, 2011

Saving Grace


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The stench is palpable
winter,
fish sandwiches,
coffee and sweat,
but the most over-powering element
in the crowded room
is not the smell
but the heavy pall
of loneliness
and tedium...
The back-to-work whistle,
their saving grace

Janet~

12 comments:

  1. I’ve read a couple of these responses to the image. So far, I like this one the best.

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  2. Anthony...thank-you:) today this means more than it would on some days.

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  3. Simple words, profound.

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  4. Vivid ... I felt and smelled the lunchroom.

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  5. I'd agree with Anthony. Your words put me there in the lunch room with you.

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  6. The Noiseless CuckooclockDecember 5, 2011 at 12:58 PM

    but the most over-powering element
    in the crowded room
    is not the smell
    but the heavy pall
    of loneliness
    and tedium...
    The back-to-work whistle,
    their saving grace



    love the strong imagery your lines painted here, powerful tale.

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  7. I've read this poem three times. I want to say how much I like it, but I can't find the words. It's simply excellent. I know this place.

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  8. nice...loce the focus on the smells...the smell of tedium and loneliness sits heavy...well done...

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  9. Saving grace....so true and beautifully spoken Janet!

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  10. I saw thsi picture somewhere else....... must be popular!

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  11. Last line is great. Makes the workplace preferable to the canteen.

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  12. i like that you used the smell as part of the poem.. brilliant!!

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