...Today the tree wears snow
And waits for someone new to discover
The magic of moonlight
And wild apples
© Janet Martin
This was the version.
before I preferred the allure of a simple lone stanza ...
This was the version.
before I preferred the allure of a simple lone stanza ...
He tells her he would take her to the moon
If he could and she tells him
She’d settle for
A stroll to that wild apple tree in its light
He takes her to a great steak-house
They drink wine and he sighs
‘This is the best’
She tries to forget about wild apples in the moonlight
Today the tree wears snow
And waits for someone new to discover
The magic of moonlight
And wild apples
© Janet Martin
Both are so good...I too really like the simplicity of that singular stanza--but the first tells a story and makes me want to know more of it. Beauty, romance and a twinge of something wistful in there too. And I love that title!
ReplyDeleteThat stanza stands so well on its own! It made me feel the pull of wanting new love.
ReplyDelete:) Thank-you for 'feeling' it. the 'more of it' is still waiting to be written, I hope...
ReplyDeletethank-you Robyn:)
ReplyDeleteThe first (original, longer version) may not need more written on it (unless you do write more of it, and in that case I will gladly read!) but it's like a good book or movie that keeps you thinking about it and asking questions to yourself, in a good way, afterward. So it's the "hungering" for more that makes it, in part, good! And again, the single stanza poem is picture perfect. So, I am long winded today-ha! Sorry!
ReplyDeleteI love hearing what you think, but its true, the best of anything always leaves something to the imagination, right? ...the allure of what might have been or yet might be!
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