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Sunday, November 20, 2011

My Undoing...



When you kiss me like that
Oh, but kiss me like that
I feel the chill dissipate
When you hold me like that
Oh but hold me like that
I forget everything that I hate
Tempted and tried,
I will no longer fight you
My total undoing is infinite bliss
I came in here just to tease and to spite you
But you trumped my plan with your upside-down kiss...

J~
Magpie tales
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17 comments:

  1. Dave KingNovember 21, 2011 at 6:51 AM

    Adorable. Quite different from any that I've yet come across.

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  2. Janet MartinNovember 21, 2011 at 7:45 AM

    Thank-you Dave.
    If I write using a prompt I never allow myself to peek at any other poems until I have written or attempted, just in case I get deterred or distracted.

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  3. JJ Roa RodriguezNovember 21, 2011 at 9:02 AM

    love it! awesome!

    JJRod'z

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  4. Brian MillerNovember 21, 2011 at 9:24 AM

    smiles...what a beautiful love..the repeated lines feel like a sigh adding depth to this...it made me smile big...

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  5. MaryNovember 21, 2011 at 9:33 AM

    Truly a wonderful ending, Janet.

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  6. HelenNovember 21, 2011 at 10:26 AM

    Topsy-turvy ~~ I love this!

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  7. ✿November 21, 2011 at 3:40 PM

    I love the last line. :)

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  8. Susan AndersonNovember 21, 2011 at 4:12 PM

    I like that upside-down kiss!

    =)

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  9. Tumblewords:November 22, 2011 at 12:45 AM

    A lovely piece!

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  10. CadNovember 22, 2011 at 2:04 AM

    Best laid plans, eh? ♥

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  11. Janet MartinNovember 22, 2011 at 7:24 AM

    Thank-you to each of you...yes Cad, well laid plans....but you know what they say; a well-laid plan is but half the accomplishment:)

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  12. CHummelKornellNovember 22, 2011 at 10:50 AM

    I, too, never peek at others before I craft my own. That said...I love your last line. Well done!

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  13. Doctor FTSENovember 22, 2011 at 3:06 PM

    Very convincing poem.

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  14. JinksyNovember 23, 2011 at 10:08 AM

    Upside? Downside? Kisses are great from any direction!

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  15. keiths ramblingsNovember 24, 2011 at 8:43 PM

    Delightful, but I find upside down kisses a bit awkward. Makes me dribble.

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  16. Janet MartinNovember 24, 2011 at 10:38 PM

    Jinksy, yes they are!

    ...and Keith, well, the unplanned ones are still the best;-)

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  17. AnonymousNovember 26, 2011 at 7:31 PM

    great ending

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